If you take the time to read the following except, I would really appreciate any feedback you can give me. I'm just about ready to submit the memoir to an editor for a third and final edit. Thanks...........Nancy
Thanks for all the feedback. It was very helpful. I have removed the excerpt
in order to re-write: Chapter 16, Jasonspeak
Jason sounds like a few teenage daughters I know. Please tell me he didn't keep his job.
ReplyDeleteIn my other life, the one before children and madness, I was a corporate trainer in the banking industry, using the same techniques you tried with Jason. I guided trainees through the process with a light hand, teaching them to rely on their own skills and giving them the ability to problem solve on their own accord. I could tell by day two, usually, if they were going to be able to do the job. I don't think Jason would have cut it with me.
I really enjoyed your memoir post. I've always wondered about the behind the scenes work entailed in running an inn or a b&b. You told your story with a clear voice and I found it totally engaging.
Joann: You will never know how much it means to me to hear comments like this one. Thank you so much. This piece is one of my later chapters and I have been having the feeling later that my writing is greatly improved from when I began my memoir a year and a half ago. When I return to earlier chapters, they don't seem to have the openness and flow that the later ones have. It's hard to tell sometimes when you're reading your own stuff over and over again, but I feel more at ease now...writing memoir can be tricky. It requires an openness and authenticity that is sometimes hard to get at. It has to come without pushing and just pour out easily onto the written page.
ReplyDeleteJason is still with me and continues to improve, although still slowly...three steps foreward...one step back...and so on.